It's long, it's really narrow and it never ends. I want to stop but I just keep going.
The silence is deafening, the stairs are steep and the spikes lined on both sides of the walls constantly jab me into the realization that i am alive.
Wait, i thought...
No! It can't be, but what about the sweet release i felt, after i'd shut my eyes and felt life leave me?
Even on this other end, i'm still troubled. Maybe if i kept walking... Perhaps
Where am i going though? i can't see as it's pitch black. I can only grope my way through but even that is tortuous, so i lay down. There are creatures circling my feet, sewer Rats?
I feel empty.
I feel lost, in so many different ways...
As i slip into unconsciousness, i start to yearn for the things i'd missed; the voices of my loved ones, a warm hand on my wrist & a rib-cracking-straight-from-the-heart bear hug of a friend :)
Then i smile at the last thing i saw as my eyelids lower, before my dark descent... the beautiful grey sky.
Author's note: I wrote this to redirect my thoughts from my (almost) depressed state. I'm not sure if it'll make any sense to anyone, but heck! i posted it anyway.
Please don't forget to share/post your comments, views, thoughts or contributions, thank You!
Bye now
- By SporadicWriter
The silence is deafening, the stairs are steep and the spikes lined on both sides of the walls constantly jab me into the realization that i am alive.
Wait, i thought...
No! It can't be, but what about the sweet release i felt, after i'd shut my eyes and felt life leave me?
Even on this other end, i'm still troubled. Maybe if i kept walking... Perhaps
Where am i going though? i can't see as it's pitch black. I can only grope my way through but even that is tortuous, so i lay down. There are creatures circling my feet, sewer Rats?
I feel empty.
I feel lost, in so many different ways...
As i slip into unconsciousness, i start to yearn for the things i'd missed; the voices of my loved ones, a warm hand on my wrist & a rib-cracking-straight-from-the-heart bear hug of a friend :)
Then i smile at the last thing i saw as my eyelids lower, before my dark descent... the beautiful grey sky.
Author's note: I wrote this to redirect my thoughts from my (almost) depressed state. I'm not sure if it'll make any sense to anyone, but heck! i posted it anyway.
Please don't forget to share/post your comments, views, thoughts or contributions, thank You!
Bye now
- By SporadicWriter
Fantastic note!!! keep it up, babe...
ReplyDeleteThanks Macky
DeleteShort piece. Clear picture.... All's well that ends well :)
ReplyDeleteOn another note, get with the times b. Wordpress yo -_-
oh move Kevws! You of all people should know i'm Google biased :p
DeleteNo beating about the bush...I could tell without the side note that this was a troubled soul writing. Seeking reprieve from a life that's not working perhaps? Or wondering if this routine is all there is to life on this side? Or just in need of plain old TLC...
ReplyDeleteI like that its open-ended...leaves d reader wondering...and I like that u were able to channel ur feelings.
Good job tee-i!
I was telling a friend this morning, how sometimes I feel like giving up. January last year, I got so depressed and developed hBP. 3months ago, I took pills and I'm surprised I woke up. You are into the creative patterns: with a lot of ideas swimming into your head, you get 1 and focus on it. Then you are in a society where struggling takes you diverse heights of desperation, people who are desperate to turn you down. We are who we are... Everyday, living in btwn the angers and happiness of people around us, we are going to lose our heads and its almost likely: then we see the sun, a major light, not the one from outer space but the one from within, hope stored somewhere from an energy we must have acquired over time: an energy that will then give us that hope.... Nice work Temi, thnks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteI was telling a friend this morning, how sometimes I feel like giving up. January last year, I got so depressed and developed hBP. 3months ago, I took pills and I'm surprised I woke up. You are into the creative patterns: with a lot of ideas swimming into your head, you get 1 and focus on it. Then you are in a society where struggling takes you diverse heights of desperation, people who are desperate to turn you down. We are who we are... Everyday, living in btwn the angers and happiness of people around us, we are going to lose our heads and its almost likely: then we see the sun, a major light, not the one from outer space but the one from within, hope stored somewhere from an energy we must have acquired over time: an energy that will then give us that hope.... Thnks for sharing . Nice work
ReplyDeleteI was telling a friend this morning, how sometimes I feel like giving up. January last year, I got so depressed and developed hBP. 3months ago, I took pills and I'm surprised I woke up. You are into the creative patterns: with a lot of ideas swimming into your head, you get 1 and focus on it. Then you are in a society where struggling takes you diverse heights of desperation, people who are desperate to turn you down. We are who we are... Everyday, living in btwn the angers and happiness of people around us, we are going to lose our heads and its almost likely: then we see the sun, a major light, not the one from outer space but the one from within, hope stored somewhere from an energy we must have acquired over time: an energy that will then give us that hope.... Nice work Temi
ReplyDeleteThis is so Ann rice, loving the description of how you feel. Beyond deep
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